FRIDAY FICTION with RONOVAN WRITES – Prompt #14 – A message… – With Audio


Friday prompt time!  Ronovan has persuaded me to end up writing a series, that wasn’t the original idea with this whole challenge, but I am really enjoying it! Check out this week’s prompt here.

Prompt for Challenge

FIRST OF ALL: Please remember, this is NOT a race. Take your time. Friday is only a part of the title, not a deadline. SECONDLY, if the story is flowing, don’t let the word count stop you; keep writing. THIRDLY, if you are an ACTIVE challenge participant and you just aren’t feeling the prompt, write something and ping back or paste your link. I’ll still include it in the #Links post the following Friday.

You’ve just been handed a message that makes you drop to the floor, trembling uncontrollably.

  • No more than a Word Count of 600. (SUGGESTED)
  • Using the above scenario, create a scene of what the note is about, and why it makes you react the way you do. (REQUIRED)
  • No external dialogue for this scene. (SUGGESTED)

So we are on a journey with Lara… trying to work out what the relationship is between her and her best guy mate, Neil…

To be honest, it’s not going too great at the moment…

Check out the next installment!

Just Friends Part 4

Letting herself into the flat, Lara sighed with relief.  Ok, so there may have been some strange looks as she attempted to swim a full length of the pool without coming up for air, especially as she couldn’t do it, and approximately 10 seconds into her attempt, she came up floundering, gasping for air, splashing around as if someone had been holding her down. Then when she saw that she had only swum around 5 metres in her attempt at surreptitious escape, she thought it would be better to just swim normally, as quickly as possible, and get out of the pool, the changing rooms, the gym in general, and away from Neil and Mya.

A quick glance had confirmed that they hadn’t seen her. They were too busy having a quick fondle in the corner of the pool.  Really, it’s disgusting how some couples behave in public! Don’t they know there are impressionable children about, and some easily shocked elderly folk?! (But not actually here in the gym pool, seeing as you had to be over 18 to get membership, and the oldest person she had seen here wasn’t older than 50… it wasn’t that kind of family friendly place, let’s face it, it was a place for testosterone fuelled males came to ‘pump’ and where skimpy gym gear clad females took ‘classes’ and used all the machines that made them look good… The looks a bouncing chest got, on the running machine, even when strapped up in the latest sports bra, always did wonders for the ego!)

Stepping into the shower to get rid of that awful gym/chlorine smell, Lara thought to herself.  They looked happy, didn’t they?  She was the stupid one. Where had she got this half-cocked idea from, that Neil could ever look at her in any sort of romantic way?

A quick look at her phone had confirmed that Neil hadn’t sent her any replies to her text earlier that day too.  He probably just wanted shot of her, that lunatic bunny boiler mate of his.

Stepping out of the shower, she wrapped herself up in a towel, and was absentmindedly rough drying her hair, as she went off to her room to get ready. Melissa passed her on the way. She looked like she was on her way out. Good. Lara had an evening to wallow in private, with no one to ask her what the matter was.  She was sure that in a while, she would need to, as many women do, dissect the moments of last night, and see whether there was anything she should have done differently.  There would come a time when she would need her friend to reassure her that how she had behaved was perfectly normal, and that he was the idiot for not reciprocating as he was expected.

But not tonight.  Tonight, she needed time alone to try and forget.

She looked up and noticed Melissa waving frantically at her. She was on the phone, handset wedged in between  ear and shoulder, having some conversation confirming her evening’s plans, and was trying to apply some last minute gloss to her lips.  In the free hand, she was waving a piece of paper at Lara.  Lara went to get it, and got a quick wave from her flatmate before the front door shut.

What was this?

She looked down at the handwritten message, innocently scrawled on the back of a flyer advertising therapy sessions for those souls lost in the land of love… ironic.

As she read the message, she felt her knees start to tremble. Oh fudge!

“Hi Lar,

I’m off out for the evening, might be a late one, or if I get lucky, I might not see you until the morning! 😉

Before I forget, you got a message.  Mya called.  She said something about calling her, to meet for coffee tomorrow.

See ya hun!




Ok so the fact Melissa was off out and not expecting to come home was not the reason for the wobbling mass of jelly that seemed to have taken place of her legs…

Lara sunk to the floor.

Mya wanted to see her.


I hope you are enjoying the twists and turns in Lara’s Life!

Please do let me know what you think!

Audio File

41 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Judy Martin
    Mar 13, 2016 @ 05:53:27

    This is coming along brilliantly Ritu and I am looking forward to reading the next instalment! 🙂

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  5. Writings Of A Single Girl
    Feb 26, 2016 @ 10:41:40

    I really liked this. I was hoping the note would be from Neil declaring his love for her(too optimistic?) but alas! You have me wondering what happens next with Mya?!

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  6. KL Caley
    Feb 26, 2016 @ 09:17:54

    Wow Ritu, this is amazing! I particularly loved the humour in it. I could feel the embarrassment and the eye-rolling that these places bring out in people. Great job. KL ❤

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  8. Ronovan
    Feb 25, 2016 @ 18:10:59

    Next prompt involves a liquid concentrated

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    • Ritu
      Feb 25, 2016 @ 18:16:14

      Good God Ron!!! What are you putting me through! !! 😁😁

      Liked by 1 person


      • Ronovan
        Feb 25, 2016 @ 18:24:50

        🙂 Just kidding. Thought I would leave you hanging. But I am keeping your story in mind when I do the prompts, while making the broad enough for interpretation.

        Liked by 1 person

      • Ritu
        Feb 25, 2016 @ 18:26:14

        Bless you! I can breathe again now lol!!! 😁

        Liked by 1 person

      • Ronovan
        Feb 25, 2016 @ 18:44:01

        Think body oils that heat up as you rub them in more. That should be an interesting situation for Lara and Mya. O,O I have no idea where that one came from. Sometimes it’s a curse having a creative mind without a filter. I think it, I type it. You should be here in person. It’s even worse.

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      • Ritu
        Feb 25, 2016 @ 19:24:14

        Lol!!! 😂😂😂 cheeky! !! I must admit, I suffer the same ailment but then I remember my mum reads! !! Lol!!

        Liked by 1 person

      • Ronovan
        Feb 25, 2016 @ 19:27:55

        I’m pretty safe most of the time. My Southern Romance I’m working on the final draft of does go a bit … in places, but for character growth purposes, which sounds odd, but true. Hope you enjoy the book you downloaded. Email me if you have questions or anything. Remember, it was a co-authored thing so you might wonder at times. I based Wallace’s thoughts and beliefs and the like on myself. Not sure if that comes through or not.

        Liked by 1 person

      • Ritu
        Feb 25, 2016 @ 20:11:47

        I will definitely feedback once I have read it! 😊

        Liked by 1 person

  9. Hugh's Views and News
    Feb 22, 2016 @ 18:13:48

    Oh yes, I’m enjoying this story very much. You’ve left us on a cliff-hanger again which is always a great way to get readers to come back. I hope it’s not going to be ‘handbags at dawn’ for Lara.

    Liked by 1 person


  10. Marquessa
    Feb 21, 2016 @ 02:08:08

    This is great!

    Liked by 1 person


  11. jacquelineobyikocha
    Feb 19, 2016 @ 17:57:20

    That sounds interesting. I wonder who Mya is and why she didn’t seem too excited by the message?

    Liked by 1 person


  12. Erika Kind
    Feb 19, 2016 @ 17:31:00

    I definitely do enjoy, Sis! I am so glad you keep the story up! Very cool. Are you deciding from time to time how the story goes or is the concept in your head meanwhile?

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