So, I am trying my hand at the fifth challenge by the Carrot Ranchers for their Flash Fiction Rodeo!
There are many rules and regulations, but the essence is a story told in eleven tweets. with only nine words per sentence, so 99 words. And the hash tags #FFRodeo and #Twitterflash must be in each tweet too!
Character limits… word limits… tweet limits! Phew! But I did it! Here goes!
P.S. – These are interactive tweets… you can like, etc from here!!!
Now let me tell you an age-old story today.
One where boy loves girl and girl loves boy.
But their love is forbidden: their families sworn enemies.
Meet Ameena, a Muslim girl, and Jas, a Sikh.
Thrown together by fate: in a broken down elevator.
Hours spent in close proximity; attraction begins to bloom
Clandestine meetings in the months that follow, feeding obsessions.
Disaster strikes when they are discovered by their families.
A hastily arranged marriage for Ameena, thwarted by Jas.
Both families at war; lives cut short; honour killings.
Two hearts, one soul, forever beating to one rhythm.
But I Smile Anyway... 
Oct 22, 2017 @ 08:38:09
Seeing it in one go like this actually takes something away I think. Meaning that I can see that you used the tweet requirement of working in the fewer characters and a gradual, episodic revealing of each new element of the story better. Well done!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 22, 2017 @ 08:41:38
Thank you so much Bryntin! It has a different allure to it, trying to write within tweet capacities!
LikeLike
Oct 22, 2017 @ 08:46:58
Of course, if it was me, I would probably have subverted the whole thing.
‘Sorry, I just thought everyone had 280 characters now!….’
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 22, 2017 @ 09:05:00
Lol! That had been addressed in the rules… even if you are one of the lucky ones, still adhere to the 140 character rule!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 22, 2017 @ 06:01:26
Wow this is very clever Ritu,well done!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 22, 2017 @ 08:37:48
Thank you so much Debbie! It was a toughie but I enjoyed the challenge!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 16:55:16
This sounds like so much fun. I wish I had more time to participate in some of these events. I:) Thanks for sharing with all of us, Ritu. π
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 17:06:56
Thanks for reading and apprecating Lisa!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 17:08:30
You’re welcome!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 16:54:27
What a challenge! And you nailed it. What a sad tale π₯
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 17:06:11
~Thank you Hayley. It was hard but I’m pretty pleased with the result!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 15:39:33
Your posts are always creative and unique, Ritu…:)
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 15:53:26
Thank you Anindya!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 14:37:21
Very good Ritu, not something I would even attempt in a million years but well done π
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 15:19:47
Thank you ! I like to push myself a little!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 16:27:58
I think that was pushing yourself a lot I couldn’t do that Ritu and reading comments neither could some of the others …Well done π
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 16:30:38
You are so sweet!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 13:49:45
Never heard of that one Ritu, and err, just no. Long fiction yes, this short stuff just no!! Impressed mind, especially if you are ill, like my eldest too alas. Look forward to the break and hello plague.
As Hugh says; tough challenge so kudos π #GaTu
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 15:18:49
Thanks Gary. Just woke from a 2 hour nap… still feel rough…
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 16:54:51
Just the way to start half term; My eldest got back from CERN last night at midnight; left here at 3.30 am. Very long day and came back with a cold sprouting too. He got up at 3.30 this afternoon lol.
Really hope yours is a 24 hour thing. x
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 17:06:36
I hope so too Gary! #GaTu
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 13:44:06
Forever beating to one rhythm because they were both killed! Honor killings! Interesting premise, but I can’t help but want more.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 15:17:56
Thanks Angela! Shame I ran out of tweets!!!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 17:48:06
Ha! Such a good exercise though.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 13:22:23
Well done. I will never be able to get this one!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 15:16:12
Thank you!
LikeLike
Oct 21, 2017 @ 13:15:06
you exhausted me with your creativity and output. Always writing/creating something. Well done.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 15:15:50
The rest of life exhausts me… writing keeps me going. Thank you xxx
LikeLike
Oct 21, 2017 @ 12:06:51
You clever lady! Who knew R & J could be told in modern day and in so few words?! Love it x (Sorry short shoulder dislocated
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 12:17:12
Thank you especially since your shoulder hurts!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 10:44:24
Beautifully done! I could never be so succinct.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 10:54:47
Thank you so much Phil!
LikeLike
Oct 21, 2017 @ 10:34:07
Alas I’m sure that Romeo and Juliet will forever be told in different places, and at different times.
I enjoyed your tweeted, transposed version.
Thanks.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 10:53:56
IT will indeed Mickey. Thank you for reading and appreciating!
LikeLike
Oct 21, 2017 @ 09:34:18
Great job! Loved it.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 10:50:34
Thanks Lucy!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 09:30:35
Interesting concept Ritu. I thought it was quite good! A classic story of forbidden love in a new setting.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 09:32:39
Thank you! It is a simple common story but in a different form!
LikeLike
Oct 21, 2017 @ 09:41:26
I like it.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 09:28:48
Well, I always learn something new on your blog. Carrot Ranch is definitely something new π
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 09:32:14
I’ve really enjoyed their October challenges! Stretching my brain!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 09:25:11
I love how you’ve used the element of surprise so effectively in this Ritu! It sets itself up nicely as a Romeo and Juliet story in the first few tweets and yet you keep introducing details I didn’t expect or putting a new spin on things – really clever! π
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 21, 2017 @ 09:31:35
Thank you so much Claire! It was hard but very satisfying!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 20, 2017 @ 23:00:24
” Carrot Ranch Flash Fition Rodeo ” – when I read the title, for a moment I thought this must be Ritu’s latest craze about some new fitness routineβΊ
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 20, 2017 @ 23:18:32
Lol!!!!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 20, 2017 @ 18:34:03
Very well done, sis!!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 20, 2017 @ 18:35:30
Glad you liked it sis!!!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 20, 2017 @ 18:53:50
This is not easy at all and you did great!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 20, 2017 @ 16:50:32
Well done. This is the toughest of the challenges so far, but you did a great job, Riitu.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 20, 2017 @ 17:15:39
Thank you so much Hugh!!! Means a lot coming from you!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 20, 2017 @ 17:17:35
I’m having a go as well, but haven’t managed to get just 99 words! Still trying, though. π
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 20, 2017 @ 17:23:04
It is tough but you can do it! xx
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 19, 2017 @ 22:54:54
So cool that you went out of your comfort zone and joined! And you used the embedded tweets! Excellent. You said you might try that…glad you did. Well done on the story. Horrible and beautiful.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 19, 2017 @ 22:56:28
Thank you so much, Sarah, you inspired me this morning with your story, and the tweet presentation!!!!!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 19, 2017 @ 22:27:43
Brilliant Sis πΉπ
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 19, 2017 @ 22:33:57
Did you get/like it, sis? That was a tough but pretty cool way to develop a bit of fiction!
LikeLike
Oct 20, 2017 @ 08:02:27
Yes Sis I understand the style and I liked the story, like a modern day Romeo and Juliet though set in the real world of Muslim non Muslim and honour killings. Well done Sis beautifully written. π
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 20, 2017 @ 08:09:46
Thank you sis π
LikeLike
Oct 20, 2017 @ 08:14:49
Have a good day last one for a while.π
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 20, 2017 @ 08:30:12
Thank you sis!!!!
LikeLike
Oct 20, 2017 @ 08:30:26
ππΉπΉπΉπΉ
LikeLiked by 1 person
Oct 20, 2017 @ 08:10:34
πππ
LikeLike