May 3 – Flash Fiction – Lines

Charli’s prompt this week:

May 3, 2018, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) use a line in your story. You can think of the variation of the word meaning, or you can think of visual references. Go where the prompt leads.

Lines
“Here’s ten pence.”
“Sorry, do I know you?”
“Call your mum. Tell her you’re not coming home.”
“What?”
“You must be so tired.”
“Huh?”
“Because you’ve been running through my dreams all night.”
“Just stop.”
“I seem to have lost my phone number. Can I have yours?”
“Seriously?”
“Kiss me if I’m wrong, but dinosaurs still exist, right?”
“Oh God!”
“Can I follow you home? Cause my parents always told me to follow my dreams.”
“You know, if you’d just asked me out, I’d have probably said yes. But after those cheesy pick-up lines, I really don’t think so!”

https://carrotranch.com/2018/05/04/may-3-flash-fiction-challenge/

50 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. LitLangIsLife
    May 23, 2018 @ 11:22:23

    Lol, I enjoyed this so much ^_^ nice work

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  2. Colleen Chesebro
    May 11, 2018 @ 02:13:42

    Bhahahahaha! That was brilliant, Ritu! ❤ Now, how did you get the cute GIF above? ❤

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  3. Charli Mills
    May 10, 2018 @ 03:24:19

    Ritu, this reads like a train ready to derail on these tired lines! Great dialog to make this cheese pop as a flash.

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    • Ritu
      May 10, 2018 @ 05:49:45

      Cheesy chat up lines were the first thing that came to mind when I read your prompt, and then made me reminisce about the times I was approached in bars and clubs at University. Of course no one was that persistant, to use all those lines at once, but there were a few good tries!!! 😀

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  5. anuragbakhshi
    May 07, 2018 @ 09:50:11

    Full marks for sheer determination and pig-headedness 🙂

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  6. Shallow Reflections
    May 06, 2018 @ 21:29:29

    Persistent and creative even if the lines are cheesy! -Molly Stevens

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  7. LucciaGray
    May 06, 2018 @ 11:43:16

    Lol! What a coincidence, I also went to a dating scene for my ‘lines’ flash:)

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  8. syl65
    May 05, 2018 @ 22:06:48

    Watch out Casanova!!

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  9. dornahainds
    May 05, 2018 @ 18:50:55

    Too funny. 😎🥀

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  10. OIKOS™-Redaktion
    May 05, 2018 @ 07:46:33

    “Can I follow you home? Cause my parents always told me to follow my dreams.”
    😉

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  11. OIKOS™-Redaktion
    May 05, 2018 @ 07:45:05

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  12. Radhika Acharya
    May 05, 2018 @ 03:36:12

    This is a classic case of “line maro-ing” as we would call it in our college days. 🙂 🙂
    Trying to hit on someone in a cheesy way!!
    Funny !!

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  13. mitchteemley
    May 04, 2018 @ 21:45:15

    ;>) Pick-up lines that bad should result in capital punishment.

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  14. thedarknetizen
    May 04, 2018 @ 20:47:16

    Hahaha! XD
    Those lines were really bad!
    Nice read! 🙂

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  15. manyofus1980
    May 04, 2018 @ 20:00:53

    hahaha! 😀 love this!

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  16. Sheldon Kleeman
    May 04, 2018 @ 19:50:54

    I love this piece
    Real strong images
    Sheldon

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  17. Erika Kind
    May 04, 2018 @ 19:07:59

    There is a commercial on an Austrian radio station which also comes with such stupid chat-up lines… lol!

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  18. scr4pl80
    May 04, 2018 @ 19:00:58

    Very funny!

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