August 16 – Flash Fiction – Comet

Charli’s prompt this week:

August 16, 2018, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about a comet. You can consider how it features into a story, influences a character, or creates a mood. Go where the prompt leads.

Heavenly Calling
It was 1910. She was ten. She’d often sit on her windowsill, legs dangling, staring out at the stars. That night, she’d seen something different, a ball of light travelling through the sky.
Haley’s Comet.
She never expected to see that in her lifetime again, and yet here she was, in 1986, eyes trained on the stars, with her ten-year-old granddaughter for company.
A ball of light flashed through the sky. Doris smiled and sat back.
“I saw it! Did you see it? Gramma!! Did you see it?” Rosie turned to her grandma.
Gramma sat, eyes closed, at peace.

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43 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. manyofus1980
    Sep 26, 2018 @ 00:52:50

    Hey Ritu, an old post but… I love it! Great writing! ❤ xxxx

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    Sep 03, 2018 @ 04:18:46

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  3. John Fredrick
    Sep 02, 2018 @ 00:42:33

    I loved your 100 word flash fiction story. The ending well thought out. Every word had a purpose. Loved it! I’m going it a try at 100 word flash fiction stories. I’ve been writing 1,000 flash fictions thus far.

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  5. pedometergeek
    Aug 21, 2018 @ 00:40:56

    Touching story

    Like

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  6. anuragbakhshi
    Aug 20, 2018 @ 12:24:59

    Awesome, what an ending.

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  7. robbiesinspiration
    Aug 19, 2018 @ 09:49:33

    Ooooh, very poignant, Ritu.

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  8. willowdot21
    Aug 18, 2018 @ 07:01:52

    Nice take Sis, peaceful and lovely ending.💜

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  9. Erika Kind
    Aug 17, 2018 @ 20:28:47

    What a lovely take, sis. Very touching!

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  10. Marje @ Kyrosmagica
    Aug 17, 2018 @ 18:45:07

    Oh we all have to go somehow and that sounds like a magical way to go.

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  11. dornahainds
    Aug 17, 2018 @ 18:11:47

    Awe. What a Wonderful story. 🥀

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  12. Charli Mills
    Aug 17, 2018 @ 17:26:07

    Oh, wow, I didn’t expect that ending, and yet what a peaceful and spectacular way to go. Good one, Reena!

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  13. Annette Rochelle Aben
    Aug 17, 2018 @ 14:36:59

    You are the Queen of the surprise endings… awesome

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  14. syl65
    Aug 17, 2018 @ 14:06:05

    Really touching story Sister 💜

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  15. ellenbest24
    Aug 17, 2018 @ 10:07:53

    Uplifting and carefully consructed. Very nice Ritu.

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  16. Amanda
    Aug 17, 2018 @ 09:54:04

    Beautiful and heartwarming ❤

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  17. The Febrile Imaginings Of A Cluttered Mind
    Aug 17, 2018 @ 09:52:16

    Beautiful short piece. Nicely written. G:)

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  18. Natesh
    Aug 17, 2018 @ 08:59:16

    It’s beautiful ! The way you write can inspire a lot of people.Keep up with the good work
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  19. Rainyshadows
    Aug 17, 2018 @ 08:54:10

    Wow heart melting ♥

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  20. barbtaub
    Aug 17, 2018 @ 08:35:22

    Such a lovely bittersweet moment. This is wonderful!

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