Friday Fiction with Ronovan #4- It’s Not Happening

Friday is the day Ronovan allows us to get busy with a flash fiction prompt.  There were no word limits to the previous prompts, but, as Ronovan says this week, the true meaning of flash fiction is to keep it succinct.  Short and sweet.  Trim the fat.

That is always hard for me. I talk too much, hence I also write too much too!

Check out his prompt post here.  Aside from actually making sure we keep to a limit of 500 words, or under, he suggested thinking of an adult situation but from a child’s perspective.

Now for my attempt this week. Any opinions are welcome!

It’s Not Happening

When will it stop?

It doesn’t matter how far under the covers I go, I can still hear them. They think I’m asleep. They think I’m too young to understand.

But I’m not so young that I can’t work things out for myself.

It happens all the time.

The shouting. The slamming of doors. Then the next morning, the frosty glances at each other, but these huge smiles, and eyes brimming with love, looking at us.

They are fighting all the time nowadays, mum and dad. But not in front of us. My younger brother, he really is too little. He hasn’t a clue. But I am not stupid…

This is what happens before…

I don’t want to say it.

But my friend at school, he had parents who fought all the time, and they, well, they aren’t together anymore. He says he’s happy, he gets two of everything nowadays, two birthdays, two Christmas Days, and whenever they are having more disagreements, he gets one off presents too, it’s like they are buying him.

The thing is, when I look at him, really look at him, there is way too much sadness in his 11 year old eyes. I’ve seen him, looking at other friends of ours, with their parents at school functions, and he might think he can hide it, but there is that sense of longing for peace, and happiness in his own parent’s life.

Back to now.

Is this what is happening here? Why are they fighting so much? Are we doing something wrong? Is it me? I didn’t mean to get that detention the other day, but I overslept in the morning, after being awake, listening to them argue, and because I was late, the teacher just slapped me with that yellow note… One hour detention.

Mum was livid when I got home, she didn’t know why I was late, and then she told dad, and later that night, they were at it again…

Or was it when I asked for the new X-Box? I didn’t mean to get stroppy, but when I stomped off, because Dad said no, the murmuring started again. I knew they would be fighting before long.

Maybe I’ll get my homework done faster, do all my reading, before mum says. I’ll tell my brother to tidy up with me, and we can even make them breakfast, or do the hoover.

That’ll show them we love them, and that we aren’t bad. I’ll even say sorry.

As long as it stops the shouting… the fighting… the possibility that….

Thank you for reading!

32 Comments (+add yours?)

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  2. wafflemethis
    Dec 10, 2015 @ 05:28:44

    Brilliant sis☺

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  3. mbarkersimpson
    Dec 09, 2015 @ 00:57:31

    Beautifully told, I could hear the echo of fear in the child’s voice and it went straight to the heart.

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  4. Janni Styles
    Dec 08, 2015 @ 13:50:01

    Love the world through the “child’s eyes.” I think you did a great job and you shouldn’t be so hard on yourself. It takes a lot to keep me reading and your fiction piece succeeded! 🙂

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  5. Ronovan
    Dec 07, 2015 @ 20:57:56

    I think your fans have said it all. 🙂

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  6. edwinasepisodes
    Dec 06, 2015 @ 00:58:27

    That was brilliant Ritu. I can picture the poor child worrying sick over what he thinks he has done wrong to make his parents argue, Sad and shocking.

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  7. Erika Kind
    Dec 05, 2015 @ 10:35:15

    Wow, Ritu! That went deep. We adults know that whatever occurs, occurs from their problems with each other….. but the kids see it in a different relation. It is so important for partents who part that they make sure that the kids know it has nothing to do with them. Not easy because that believe settles early! You wrote that amazingly soulful, Sis!

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  8. wwwpalfitness
    Dec 05, 2015 @ 04:16:03

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  9. PrairieChat
    Dec 05, 2015 @ 02:06:11

    You and Kat make me want to go under my covers again. Great writing though if anyone needs me, I’ll be in my room hiding in the closet!

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    • Ritu
      Dec 05, 2015 @ 08:51:16

      Lol! Thanks, and don’t be silly! Your writing is amazing! You got the emotions just right! Like I said, I knew it was a child’s thinking straight away!!!

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      • Ronovan
        Dec 07, 2015 @ 21:00:26

        After reading Clarence’s comments regarding Kat’s story, I think he means you hit some emotional buttons in him in such a clear and precise way that he feels a need to step back and regroup his emotions. Conflict gets to him. He connected with your story on that emotional level, sympathized.

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      • Ritu
        Dec 07, 2015 @ 21:03:36

        Silly me… See that’s me not thinking outsida the box!! The comments make sense in a different way now ☺

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      • Ronovan
        Dec 07, 2015 @ 21:06:06

        🙂 Hope you don’t mind my commenting on this particular conversation. Being that it’s part of the challenge I sort of felt like I could step in as long as I wasn’t being rude. And he was paying you a bigger compliment than you at first thought. I wanted you to know that.

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      • Ritu
        Dec 07, 2015 @ 21:53:14

        No, Ron, never offence taken… in fact I thank you for bringing that to my attention! ☺

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  10. blackcherriess
    Dec 05, 2015 @ 00:47:05

    heartbreaking :S sometimes more presents aren’t everything

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  11. Kat Myrman
    Dec 05, 2015 @ 00:45:19

    Wow…Ritu. You are so right about the similarities of our stories. It’s like a timeline. Mine covers the affects on a younger child and yours on a school aged child. It is a progression isn’t it. The younger children just want to feel safe and school age children, thinking they’re at fault somehow…trying to be good or better to make it stop. And I can tell you…teenagers just plan their escape…looking for ways to stay away and eventually move out. I spent many hours in my closet. Good story!

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    • Ritu
      Dec 05, 2015 @ 00:48:59

      Thank you for your feedback Kat!
      I sometimes wonder what my children think if we argue… we are by no means in a bad relationship, in fact our love is very strong, but sometimes, we disagree, and even though we know it is nothing drastic, you never know what a child may be thinking…
      You’re right, it depends so much on the age of as child with regards to the way they perceive any situation!

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