March 7: Flash Fiction Challenge – Mouse

Charli’s prompt this week:

March 7, 2019, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about a mouse. It can be real, imagined, electronic or whiskered. Go where the prompt leads!

 
Mousetrap

The pain.
It sears through my body.
I know no one will find me.
They were all much more sensible, listening to Mummy. I had to be the one who had to go and look.
Curiosity killed the cat. That’s the saying. Not the mouse, the cat.
But it was just so tempting.
I could smell it.
That whiff of cheesiness.
I knew it was out there somewhere.
And I found it too.
Sat there, right in front of me, was a huge chunk of the best cheddar.
How was I to know it was on a state-of-the-art mousetrap?

 Ritu 2019

46 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. M K Zebra
    Mar 17, 2019 @ 18:18:12

    Poor 🐁. Remember, in pest control, exclusion is much better than extermination!

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  2. H.R.R. Gorman
    Mar 14, 2019 @ 13:45:08

    Ah! Harsh ending for little mousey!

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  4. Charli Mills
    Mar 13, 2019 @ 22:41:49

    Aw, that wee mousey. I love your play with the phrase “curiosity killed the cat.” Clever and worthy of empathy for mice, Ritu.

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  5. Jennie
    Mar 10, 2019 @ 15:15:46

    Well done, Ritu. Great story!

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  6. robertawrites235681907
    Mar 09, 2019 @ 11:47:48

    Oh dear, Ritu. Poor little mouse.

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  7. Hugh's Views and News
    Mar 09, 2019 @ 10:20:03

    Cruel! But a lovely piece of writing.

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  8. syl65
    Mar 09, 2019 @ 03:55:46

    Resistance is futile 😀

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  9. OIKOS™-Publishing
    Mar 09, 2019 @ 01:43:53

    Seems Sonu is more Mr. Cat, than a real mouse hunter. Lol Wonderful written story. How to imagine the mouse will be cought by a trapp, if a cat is in da house. 😉 Have a nice weekend, Sis! Michael

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  10. explorereikiworld
    Mar 09, 2019 @ 01:41:12

    Jeez! the steps humans ought to take to trap them 😛

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  11. willowdot21
    Mar 09, 2019 @ 00:31:59

    Ouch, ouch! ❤ 🙂🙂🙂🙂

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  12. organiclovebykatia
    Mar 08, 2019 @ 22:54:22

    That mouse was my fear
    But despite all
    I could see it clear
    How it just was hitting the wall
    I would not let it get near
    To my h art to my soul
    So with time, it’s just dissapear
    So I almost forgot about it all

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  13. Baffledmum
    Mar 08, 2019 @ 22:08:09

    Ahhh poor mouse… Hang on – I hate mice!… In other words – great writing because you made me sympathise with a mouse… ✍👏🐁

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  14. Erika Kind
    Mar 08, 2019 @ 21:45:21

    Oh, silly little mouse 💖

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  15. Annette Rochelle Aben
    Mar 08, 2019 @ 21:45:01

    Ah, drat those amazing traps!

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