TJ’s prompt this week:
Flower & Simply
Focus your brain
Welcoming an idea
To simply flower
Ritu 2017
Or…
Focus your brain
Allowing an idea
To simply flower
Ritu 2017#
Two variations that Graeme suggested I showcase together, showing two focuses or focii!
Which one do you prefer?
manyofus1980
Nov 19, 2017 @ 23:29:05
very nicely done! where do you find all of the challenges, i mean, how? xxx
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Judy E Martin
Oct 09, 2017 @ 19:49:46
I like them both but the second one reads better ,Sis 🙂
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Ritu
Oct 09, 2017 @ 20:01:45
Thanks Sis!!! Xx
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OIKOS™-Redaktion
Oct 09, 2017 @ 16:47:52
Reblogged this on Die Erste Eslarner Zeitung – Aus und über Eslarn, sowie die bayerisch-tschechische Region!.
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willowdot21
Oct 08, 2017 @ 23:12:37
Love these Sis xx
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Ritu
Oct 09, 2017 @ 06:52:24
Thanks sis!
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willowdot21
Oct 09, 2017 @ 08:11:31
💜💜
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dornahainds
Oct 08, 2017 @ 19:35:03
The second reads more fluidly than the first, I think. 😎😎😎🥀🥀🥀
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Ritu
Oct 08, 2017 @ 19:40:59
Thank you Dorna . That was my first write actually!!!!
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dornahainds
Oct 08, 2017 @ 19:53:49
What is that p is saying, Go with your first choice aka just go with your gut feelings. 😎😎😎🥀🥀🥀
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Ritu
Oct 08, 2017 @ 19:55:53
Thank you!!!!
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teandpaper
Oct 08, 2017 @ 17:46:50
I like the ‘allowing’ one, giving permission to the idea take over!
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Ritu
Oct 08, 2017 @ 18:12:05
Thank you! That was my first attempt!
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Annette Rochelle Aben
Oct 08, 2017 @ 16:08:29
This is cool. I have yet to get into this challenge. I like what you did.
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Ritu
Oct 08, 2017 @ 16:30:56
Thank you Annette!!! TJ operates a great challenge!
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Erika Kind
Oct 08, 2017 @ 14:33:53
Two great takes. Changing one word and it gets a different (deep) meaning!
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Ritu
Oct 08, 2017 @ 15:04:46
Thank you sis!!!
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Erika Kind
Oct 08, 2017 @ 15:23:26
Very welcome 💖
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Fourth Generation Farmgirl
Oct 08, 2017 @ 14:00:57
Both haikus are lovely, especially the second one. Love your creativity, Ritu!
Enjoy your Sunday.
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Ritu
Oct 08, 2017 @ 15:01:20
Thank you Tonya!!!
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Book Club Mom
Oct 08, 2017 @ 12:36:20
Both are so nice – but I like the first one a little better. Keep them coming!
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Ritu
Oct 08, 2017 @ 14:58:27
Thank you so much!
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robbiesinspiration
Oct 08, 2017 @ 12:30:17
Very nice, Ritu. I like the second one best.
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Ritu
Oct 08, 2017 @ 14:58:08
Thank you Robbie!
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anisioluiz2008
Oct 08, 2017 @ 11:40:04
Reblogged this on O LADO ESCURO DA LUA.
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aka Cibo the Anti-Pasti Poet
Oct 08, 2017 @ 11:26:35
And sometimes punctuation ‘focuses’ the reader upon what the writer means.
Having the poem read out loud is not always possible.
But, for multiple interpretations, a lack of punctuation is often of interest.
Hope I make some sense here – and am not just confusing things.
G:)
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Ritu
Oct 08, 2017 @ 11:27:49
No you make perfect sense!!! It’s good to get some constructive feedback!! Thank you!!
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aka Cibo the Anti-Pasti Poet
Oct 08, 2017 @ 12:24:59
Prego! You are very welcome. G:)
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aka Cibo the Anti-Pasti Poet
Oct 08, 2017 @ 11:17:41
Can I suggest ‘allowing’ as an alternative to ‘welcoming’ – then you have 2 Haiku with slightly differing focuses (or is it ‘focii’?)
G:)
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Ritu
Oct 08, 2017 @ 11:19:26
I actually wrote it as allowing…! but them when I was doing the line 1-2/2-3 sentence flows it sat better with me! Do you think I should change it?
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aka Cibo the Anti-Pasti Poet
Oct 08, 2017 @ 11:23:30
Never change a thing unless you want to, Ritu. I just sometimes would have put a different word if I had written a poem that I am reading. I wouldn’t presume to tell, I just comment and try to be thoughtful in doing so.
I look at sense and flow
And then read out the poem aloud
If I am happy then all is good
I can still go back (at a distance of time) and revisit my poem
And sometimes I change it then (being older and wiser – ha!)
G:)
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Ritu
Oct 08, 2017 @ 11:24:57
I have added it as a second option instead!!!
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aka Cibo the Anti-Pasti Poet
Oct 08, 2017 @ 11:28:06
I like both – I wish I spent more time looking at my poetry, rather than just writing furiously (at a rate – I don’t do fury).
It’s good to look in depth sometimes at our constructed children. G:)
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Ritu
Oct 08, 2017 @ 11:29:50
Too true.. they are ours, after all!!!!!
Hope you have a wonderful day G! 🙂
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