Carrot Ranch Flash Fiction Rodeo Challenge 5 – To Love and Honour #FFRodeo #Twitterflash

So, I am trying my hand at the fifth challenge by the Carrot Ranchers for their Flash Fiction Rodeo!

There are many rules and regulations, but the essence is a story told in eleven tweets. with only nine words per sentence, so 99 words. And the hash tags #FFRodeo and #Twitterflash must be in each tweet too!

Character limits… word limits… tweet limits! Phew! But I did it! Here goes!

P.S. – These are interactive tweets… you can like, etc from here!!!

Now let me tell you an age-old story today.
One where boy loves girl and girl loves boy.
But their love is forbidden: their families sworn enemies.
Meet Ameena, a Muslim girl, and Jas, a Sikh.
Thrown together by fate: in a broken down elevator.
Hours spent in close proximity; attraction begins to bloom
Clandestine meetings in the months that follow, feeding obsessions.
Disaster strikes when they are discovered by their families.
A hastily arranged marriage for Ameena, thwarted by Jas.
Both families at war; lives cut short; honour killings.
Two hearts, one soul, forever beating to one rhythm.

62 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Bryntin
    Oct 22, 2017 @ 08:38:09

    Seeing it in one go like this actually takes something away I think. Meaning that I can see that you used the tweet requirement of working in the fewer characters and a gradual, episodic revealing of each new element of the story better. Well done!

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  2. Debbie Harris
    Oct 22, 2017 @ 06:01:26

    Wow this is very clever Ritu,well done!

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  3. Lisa Orchard
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 16:55:16

    This sounds like so much fun. I wish I had more time to participate in some of these events. I:) Thanks for sharing with all of us, Ritu. πŸ™‚

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  4. thebeasley
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 16:54:27

    What a challenge! And you nailed it. What a sad tale πŸ˜₯

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  5. Anindya
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 15:39:33

    Your posts are always creative and unique, Ritu…:)

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  6. blondieaka
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 14:37:21

    Very good Ritu, not something I would even attempt in a million years but well done πŸ™‚

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  7. Gary
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 13:49:45

    Never heard of that one Ritu, and err, just no. Long fiction yes, this short stuff just no!! Impressed mind, especially if you are ill, like my eldest too alas. Look forward to the break and hello plague.

    As Hugh says; tough challenge so kudos πŸ™‚ #GaTu

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  8. angelanoelauthor
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 13:44:06

    Forever beating to one rhythm because they were both killed! Honor killings! Interesting premise, but I can’t help but want more.

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  9. arv!
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 13:22:23

    Well done. I will never be able to get this one!

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  10. You Can Always Start Now
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 13:15:06

    you exhausted me with your creativity and output. Always writing/creating something. Well done.

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  11. Claire Saul (PainPalsBlog)
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 12:06:51

    You clever lady! Who knew R & J could be told in modern day and in so few words?! Love it x (Sorry short shoulder dislocated

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  12. Phil Taylor
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 10:44:24

    Beautifully done! I could never be so succinct.

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  13. Mickey Randall
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 10:34:07

    Alas I’m sure that Romeo and Juliet will forever be told in different places, and at different times.

    I enjoyed your tweeted, transposed version.

    Thanks.

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  14. Lucy Mitchell
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 09:34:18

    Great job! Loved it.

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  15. masgautsen
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 09:30:35

    Interesting concept Ritu. I thought it was quite good! A classic story of forbidden love in a new setting.

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  16. Suzanne [globalhousesitterX2]
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 09:28:48

    Well, I always learn something new on your blog. Carrot Ranch is definitely something new πŸ™‚

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  17. Claire Wong
    Oct 21, 2017 @ 09:25:11

    I love how you’ve used the element of surprise so effectively in this Ritu! It sets itself up nicely as a Romeo and Juliet story in the first few tweets and yet you keep introducing details I didn’t expect or putting a new spin on things – really clever! πŸ™‚

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  18. pranabaxom
    Oct 20, 2017 @ 23:00:24

    ” Carrot Ranch Flash Fition Rodeo ” – when I read the title, for a moment I thought this must be Ritu’s latest craze about some new fitness routine☺

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  19. Erika Kind
    Oct 20, 2017 @ 18:34:03

    Very well done, sis!!

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  20. Hugh's Views and News
    Oct 20, 2017 @ 16:50:32

    Well done. This is the toughest of the challenges so far, but you did a great job, Riitu.

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  21. Sarah Brentyn
    Oct 19, 2017 @ 22:54:54

    So cool that you went out of your comfort zone and joined! And you used the embedded tweets! Excellent. You said you might try that…glad you did. Well done on the story. Horrible and beautiful.

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  22. willowdot21
    Oct 19, 2017 @ 22:27:43

    Brilliant Sis πŸŒΉπŸ’œ

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