June 20: Flash Fiction Challenge – A Wee Wait

Charli’s Carrot Ranch prompt this week:

June 20, 2019, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story about having to wait. Who is waiting and what for? Think about how the wait impacts the character or the story. Go where the prompt leads!

A Wee Wait
“I know you’re desperate dear, but I’m afraid, you’ll have to wait. They’re all desperate.” Mrs Brown turned around, indicating the long line of children stretching to the end of the corridor.
“But Miss, I can’t wait!” Millie hopped from foot to foot, performing a toilet dance typical for a child, crotch clutched as if that was all holding a possible flood from occurring.
The queue moved down one.
“Just get to the back of the line, Millie.”
“I can’t.”
“Why on earth not?”
Millie looked down at the puddle slowly forming.
“Oh dear. so you really couldn’t wait!”

44 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Norah
    Jun 29, 2019 @ 08:24:07

    Poor Milly. She really couldn’t wait. I’ve seen it all too often.

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  3. Charli Mills
    Jun 27, 2019 @ 03:50:54

    Oh, no! When you are little and gotta go, you gotta go! But when they all have to go at once? Poor teacher. Fun take on the prompt.

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  4. Jennie
    Jun 23, 2019 @ 14:13:19

    Well done, Ritu. Been there as the teacher!

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  5. eLPy
    Jun 23, 2019 @ 04:18:45

    This is good. Reminds me of 2nd grade. We had a bathroom in class but were told to ask first. I felt sick. Teacher was talking to a student, I waited politely until I could not. I threw up on her! Then went home and later found out I had strep I so believe.

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  6. Susan Zutautas
    Jun 22, 2019 @ 19:55:24

    This always seems to happen to me when I’m in the grocery store, but thankfully I’ve always made it, barely 🙂

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  7. H.R.R. Gorman
    Jun 22, 2019 @ 14:48:07

    I was once a camp counselor and someone called a kid on his bluff – and, of course, lost. Never question a kid when they say they need to go, haha!

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  8. OIKOS™-Publishing
    Jun 22, 2019 @ 11:57:04

    Daily “business” of a teacher. LOl Very horrible if only one toilet is availabe. Got it some years ago, during children’s leisure time, i had to observe. Michael

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  9. syl65
    Jun 22, 2019 @ 03:32:18

    The toilet dance should always be taken seriously 😄

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  10. willowdot21
    Jun 21, 2019 @ 23:42:37

    The joys of looking after children 💜💜

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  11. Erika Kind
    Jun 21, 2019 @ 21:51:16

    Oh, well, a traumatic experience of quite a lot of kids…

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  12. The V Pub
    Jun 21, 2019 @ 19:20:05

    lol! That’s an act of desperation. 😉

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  13. pensitivity101
    Jun 21, 2019 @ 19:02:58

    I remember my Mum being in hospital and I was looked after by an ‘aunty’ friend. I had an accident, and the first thing I told my Mum when she got out of hospital was that Aunty had smacked me. Mum was angry, especially as it had not been my fault because I couldn’t reach the door handle to the toilet.

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  14. pranabaxom
    Jun 21, 2019 @ 18:55:58

    As we grow old, many of us will be like that child. During travels, Bathroom stops will be more frequent.
    Last December during our trip to Las Vegas etc., around sevem pm, I saw a twenty something doing that dance behind me. Many on the long line gave up all hope and went in search of greener (I mean darker) pastures (and believe me not all males).

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  15. Annette Rochelle Aben
    Jun 21, 2019 @ 18:45:11

    I have been THAT child

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