June 18: Flash Fiction Challenge – Perfect

Charli’s Carrot Ranch Prompt:

June 18, 2020, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less), write a story that includes good vibrations. What is unfolding? Is someone giving off or receiving the feeling? Where is the story situated? Gather some good vibes and go where the prompt leads!

Perfect

Pete took a few steps onto the pathway leading up to the house.

After seeing numerous houses, he was hoping that this would be The One.

Positive energy radiated off the property.

He glanced over at his wife, Nina, noticing a glimmer of a smile curling her full lips upwards.

She could feel it too.

Taking her hand in his, they stepped up to the door, lifting the brass knocker.

Nina winced, suddenly, and pulled his hand to her swollen belly.

A kick reverberated against the palm of his hand.

Looks like Junior was feeling the good vibrations, too.

27 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Jennie
    Jun 27, 2020 @ 02:05:35

    I really liked this, Ritu!

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  2. H.R.R. Gorman
    Jun 26, 2020 @ 12:56:56

    Aww, how cute.

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  4. Charli Mills
    Jun 24, 2020 @ 07:35:59

    I can almost see them all gathered in the house 10 years from now, exuding those good vibes.

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  5. Marsha
    Jun 24, 2020 @ 04:30:06

    This story revives good memories, Ritu. Thanks for sharing.

    Liked by 1 person

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  6. OIKOS™-Publishing
    Jun 21, 2020 @ 18:58:27

    Very motivating, Sis! This is what we need for future. Thank you for sharing, and excuse my late revisit. Michael

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  7. willowdot21
    Jun 21, 2020 @ 05:57:52

    Sweet story Sis 💜

    Liked by 1 person

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  8. Annette Rochelle Aben
    Jun 20, 2020 @ 14:23:34

    I have felt like this when looking at houses!

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  9. TanGental
    Jun 20, 2020 @ 08:49:36

    Aw cute. I remember those kicks waking me up…

    Liked by 2 people

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  10. thoughtsnlifeblog
    Jun 20, 2020 @ 06:42:55

    Great flash fiction

    Liked by 1 person

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  11. potatosandwich
    Jun 19, 2020 @ 20:14:23

    New beginnings

    Liked by 1 person

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  12. johnrieber
    Jun 19, 2020 @ 19:33:18

    Gret use of 99 words!

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