March 8 – Flash Fiction – Balloon

Charli’s prompt this week:

March 8, 2018, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that features a balloon. It can be a party balloon or a hot air balloon. How does it add to your story? Go where the prompt leads.

Jenny tied the last of the balloons up. There. The room looked amazing.
Decorations adorned the walls and banners saying Happy 16th Birthday were hung up around the room.
“There you are, Amelia. A party you’d have been proud to host.”
Pop!
A lone balloon burst.
And with that, Jenny burst into tears.
Was that another sign? That she wasn’t coming back?
It had been 9 years since Amelia went missing, disappeared from the local park whilst playing with her friends.
Yet Jenny had never been able to accept she wasn’t coming back.
Was it time to accept reality?

https://carrotranch.com/2018/03/09/march-8-flash-fiction-challenge/

95 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Chelsea Owens
    Mar 19, 2018 @ 01:19:30

    Ouch. So sad. 😦

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  3. Charli Mills
    Mar 15, 2018 @ 03:42:32

    Aw, Ritu, I wasn’t expecting that twist. Sad metaphor for popped hope.

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  4. manyofus1980
    Mar 12, 2018 @ 15:52:09

    Wow, powerful? so sad too…well done you!

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  5. anuragbakhshi
    Mar 12, 2018 @ 10:49:38

    Noooo, don’t lose hope Jenny.

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  6. Shallow Reflections
    Mar 11, 2018 @ 11:02:30

    I’m not sure even the pop of a balloon will give this mother closure but it’s a start.

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  7. Ritu
    Mar 11, 2018 @ 08:38:26

    Sad but true for some out there…

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  8. Norah
    Mar 11, 2018 @ 07:24:03

    That’s a sad story.

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  9. Denzil
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 20:45:22

    Very touching Ritu

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  10. Jennifer
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 20:34:24

    The balloon bursting was a surprise and changed the direction of the story.

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  11. OIKOS™-Redaktion
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 18:54:23

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  12. OIKOS™-Redaktion
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 18:53:16

    A really nice story, Ritu! And we can see how a little bit of air in a package can change the feeling. 😉 Have a good weekend. Michael

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  13. Unbound Roots
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 17:55:45

    Loved this! Powerful, to-the-point, and heartbreaking. Great one, Ritu!

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  14. robbiesinspiration
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 17:50:26

    A good twist there, Ritu.

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  15. Losing the Plot
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 15:36:24

    Oh crumbs, that’s a strong piece! Every mum’s nightmare! (But I mean that as a compliment)

    Not everyone could create that degree of emotional tension in so few words- well done

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  16. Aimer Boyz
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 15:11:36

    Wow! Way too sad for a Saturday morning. I want to wash it out of my brain.
    Good work 🙂

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  17. Jennie
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 13:10:02

    So sad, Ritu, but an ugly truth.

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  18. arv!
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 12:58:40

    When I started reading this story I wasn’t prepared for a sad ending!

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  19. Hugh's Views and News
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 12:52:36

    Powerful. Sadly, a situation we hear more about these days.

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  20. You Can Always Start Now
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 12:46:32

    I had to re-read as thought WHAT at the end. Well done.

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  21. ellenbest24
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 12:39:31

    A nightmare that sadly effects families the world over. A superb flash Ritu.

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  22. gemmaorton
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 12:16:37

    Beautiful. Touching. So much said in so few words.

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  23. Kelsey @ There's Something About KM
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 11:53:33

    Whew, this has me choked up a little! Well done. 🙂

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  24. Gary
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 11:20:05

    Oh dear, balloons….we all float down here. I’m not dead just come and have the party with me…..

    #IT

    Nicely done Ritu. Fast short fiction is a tricky beast for me, I end up with prompts that scream more lol

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  25. Phil Taylor
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 11:19:14

    Wow! That is a painfully sad 99 words!

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  26. laughingatthesky
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 11:02:40

    ahhhh…but I want to keep reading now that you’ve hooked me. Please say you’ll write more 🙂

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  27. noellekelly
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 10:31:01

    Oh, Ritu! That’s so heartbreaking and in so few words! I love the imagery of the balloon popping and loss of hope.

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  28. thatblogwherecheriemovestogermany
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 10:29:34

    Strong message in a short story. Packs a punch.

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  29. Lorna
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 10:13:30

    This one got me. Beautiful.

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  30. Anindya
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 09:54:07

    Prefect fit of the balloon in your flash fiction Ritu….even though in a sad way……well done.

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  31. Suzanne [globalhousesitterX2]
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 09:38:52

    I wonder how many people are experiencing that right now. Awful to think that anyone has to endure it. Thought provoking short story!!

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  32. Midlife Smarts
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 09:33:33

    Very powerful. Amazing what you’ve packed into 99 words.

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  33. fancypaperblog
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 09:30:51

    This one is sad x love the metaphor though

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  34. Fiona Maclean
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 09:26:05

    So sad, poignant and piercing in such few words. Excellent descriptive writing

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  35. tintins
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 07:15:05

    Really great! A sad twist. Made you think.

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  36. syl65
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 01:39:42

    Great twist Sister! A harsh reality to face.

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  37. dornahainds
    Mar 10, 2018 @ 01:17:39

    Ah! The Dangers of Hope.. 🥀🥀🥀🥀🥀

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  38. Annette Rochelle Aben
    Mar 09, 2018 @ 23:33:04

    Caught me right in the throat….

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  39. willowdot21
    Mar 09, 2018 @ 22:21:05

    That is a sad but possibly a very real scenario Sis, well done.💜

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  40. Ritu
    Mar 09, 2018 @ 21:27:17

    Thanks

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  41. Nisthur
    Mar 09, 2018 @ 20:29:36

    Lol

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  42. Erika Kind
    Mar 09, 2018 @ 20:06:08

    What a twist from the happy party to the tragedy behind. Amazingly written, sis!

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  43. scr4pl80
    Mar 09, 2018 @ 19:51:53

    Wow! That’s sad.

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