Sue’s #writephoto prompt this week.
“Is this what we’ve been searching for?” Charlie stopped suddenly at the edge of the water.
Pete reached his side shortly after, out of breath, almost doubled over with the effort of this up to now pointless hike. “Well I don’t know Chaz, feels like we’ve been on a wild goose chase so far. Bloody cryptic clues! Was always bad at these things at school as well. Why couldn’t they just write simple bloody directions? Give us a post code, you know, the satnav would have done the rest!”
“Shut your cake hole for a minute and look at this!”
Pete looked up and saw gently running water and a stone building of sorts, with two dark, dingy entrances.
“Look into my eyes, all set in stone
Upon which the green moss has grown
Step over the tears that appear to flow
And enter the cavern in which no one will go
Choose left or right, wrong or right
It’s up to you, success or plight…”
“Whaddya reckon, eh?” Charlie continued, “Four months we’ve been solving those damn riddles, getting closer and closer, and now I think we’ve gone and found the last place, you’re flaking out on me! Tell you what, if you can’t be arsed then get lost! I’ll go find the stash myself!”
“No, no, Chaz, now don’t be hasty! I wasn’t being negative at all… no, let’s go do this. Which one then eh, left or right?” Pete wasn’t relinquishing any claim to this treasure anytime soon!
They sploshed across the water and entered the cavern on the left. As their torch light faded into the darkness, the water flowed faster, as if the tears were rolling freshly, mourning another lost treasure hunter or two….
Judy E Martin
May 13, 2017 @ 16:16:40
I love the way you have done this Sis. especially with the riddle in it too. 💖💖💖
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Ritu
May 13, 2017 @ 16:22:22
Thanks Sis xx
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Judy E Martin
May 13, 2017 @ 16:25:18
I have flipped it and you are the first one in my Flash Fiction Mag I created after seeing your story! Will have to add some of my other favourites now too! 🙂 xx
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Ritu
May 13, 2017 @ 16:53:11
Aw you are so sweet! Thank you sis!!!
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Hugh's Views and News
May 13, 2017 @ 15:58:00
So, we’ll never hear from them again? A cliffhanger of an ending, Ritu. I do like solving riddles, though. Reminds me of my days with Lara Croft.
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Ritu
May 13, 2017 @ 16:04:10
Ive discovered that I like cliffhangers Hugh!
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thebeasley
May 13, 2017 @ 13:41:25
Ooh I like it & that photo is great. Very inspiring x
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Ritu
May 13, 2017 @ 14:07:05
Thanks Hayley! Sue always has great photo prompts!
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robbiesinspiration
May 13, 2017 @ 11:16:11
Great flash fiction, Ritu, and the poem is also very good.
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Ritu
May 13, 2017 @ 12:10:51
Thank you Robbie!
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charlypriest
May 12, 2017 @ 22:47:41
Really, the name was Charlie…. we got a a connection here
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Ritu
May 12, 2017 @ 22:50:12
Anď what was Charlie doing…?
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charlypriest
May 12, 2017 @ 22:53:18
I can be doing somthing good or something…..gray, is not that simple to put the person ina black or white hat, and for me. I’ ll tell you easy, in the gray.
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Ritu
May 12, 2017 @ 23:03:33
😀
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Jane Dougherty
May 12, 2017 @ 14:36:02
I’m glad someone else saw malevolent eyes. Proves I’m not completely mad 🙂
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Ritu
May 12, 2017 @ 16:23:28
I tbink we often share the same train of thought Jane!
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Jane Dougherty
May 12, 2017 @ 16:29:36
I don’t know what it says about us…
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Ritu
May 12, 2017 @ 16:49:52
Great minds and all that… (never mind the fools seldom differ bit! 😉)
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Jane Dougherty
May 12, 2017 @ 17:09:20
I hadn’t heard that last quip before. Wish I hadn’t now…
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Ritu
May 12, 2017 @ 17:30:26
Lol!! Sorry!!! Xx
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Erika Kind
May 12, 2017 @ 07:17:59
Wow, very good, sis! Thrilling story and I loved that poem too!!
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Ritu
May 12, 2017 @ 07:39:16
Thank you sis! ❤
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Erika Kind
May 12, 2017 @ 18:21:12
😘😘
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Anjana
May 12, 2017 @ 06:04:09
Wow this is amazing !!!!
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Ritu
May 12, 2017 @ 07:00:16
Thank you Anjana!
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Pamela Morse
May 12, 2017 @ 00:26:21
Great treasure hunting story. I like the possible, but unknown, demise of the hunters…
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Ritu
May 12, 2017 @ 06:57:44
A little mystery at the end never hurts, eh! Thanks Pamela!
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chris jensen
May 12, 2017 @ 00:16:21
Reblogged this on crjen1958.
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desertcurmudgeon
May 11, 2017 @ 23:12:00
Loved that! Then went back and looked at the photo prompt again and was even more impressed with where you took it.
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Ritu
May 12, 2017 @ 06:57:13
Thank you so much!
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willowdot21
May 11, 2017 @ 22:48:46
I’ve this story Sis, life is full of decisions!!🤗💜💝
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Ritu
May 12, 2017 @ 06:56:50
So many! And what were they searching for??!!
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willowdot21
May 12, 2017 @ 06:59:35
Treasure, the meaning of life? 💖💝
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Ritu
May 12, 2017 @ 07:01:06
Will we ever know…?! ❤
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willowdot21
May 12, 2017 @ 07:01:26
Who knows??? 💜💖
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willowdot21
May 12, 2017 @ 07:22:46
Treasure, the meaning of life? 💖💝
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Ritu
May 12, 2017 @ 07:39:33
Could be sis!
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willowdot21
May 12, 2017 @ 08:56:40
🤔💝
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Sue Vincent
May 11, 2017 @ 22:43:56
Yep, it is all about the choices …
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Ritu
May 11, 2017 @ 22:45:40
It is indeed!!!
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