February 15 – Flash Fiction – Ice

Charli’s prompt this week:

February 15, 2018, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story on ice. It can be an event on ice, a game on ice or a drink on ice. Go where the prompt leads you…

As she poured the scotch, Paula could hear the cracks as the warmth of the liquid began the melting of the ice cubes in the tumbler.
If only she could be like that drink, and her presence the liquid that slowly caused the ice around his heart to melt…
She didn’t know why he was so cold towards her, they’d barely spoken twice, since he started coming to the bar where she worked, but she was determined.
He was a good looking guy, and by all appearances, well off too.
And she was a girl who needed looking after…

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26 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Lisa A. Listwa
    Feb 22, 2018 @ 03:45:04

    Ah, those first two lines are terrific! Love the mood you create, the sensory detail.

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  2. Charli Mills
    Feb 20, 2018 @ 07:03:08

    There seem to be cracks in both characters that could be healed with some shared warmth. A creative take on the prompt, Ritu!

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  3. anuragbakhshi
    Feb 19, 2018 @ 08:54:11

    Great noir feel to it. Lovely story Ritu.

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  4. syl65
    Feb 17, 2018 @ 04:16:40

    A romantic mystery…

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  5. Fourth Generation Farmgirl
    Feb 17, 2018 @ 03:13:16

    This is lovely, Ritu.

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  6. Annette Rochelle Aben
    Feb 17, 2018 @ 02:12:26

    Well, I could change my name to Paula…

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  7. dornahainds
    Feb 16, 2018 @ 23:58:01

    Great cliffhanger.. 😎🥀😎🥀😎🥀

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  8. Colleen Chesebro
    Feb 16, 2018 @ 21:01:50

    Nice one, Ritu. I’ll have a glass of wine. 😀 ❤

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  9. iScriblr
    Feb 16, 2018 @ 18:01:42

    Wonderful!👏👏

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  10. Kelsey @ There's Something About KM
    Feb 16, 2018 @ 17:43:43

    Love this.

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  11. debyblogs
    Feb 16, 2018 @ 17:40:06

    Lovely.

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  12. robbiesinspiration
    Feb 16, 2018 @ 17:34:54

    Excellent, Ritu.

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