Invitation #writephoto

Sue’s #WritePhoto prompt:

Every day, we walk past that gate.

It looks so creepy, and the walls are covered with this green litchen moss that indicates no-one really looked after the place.

I always wonder what is behind it though. The grounds inside are so overgrown that there is no way of glimpsing the house that it guards. Nanna said that it had been a beautiful house when she was young. There were always streams of folk in and out, parties happening regularly. She remembers standing near the gate with her friends, as a young girl, hoping to catch a glimpse of the beautiful frocks that the ladies visiting the house wore.

Then one day, the gates mysteriously closed, and never opened again.

Mummy says that bad things happened there. Someone died, and a child went missing. Nanna can’t recall what exactly happened. When I ask her, she just reminisces about pretty dresses.

There are so many rumours amongst the village.

A happy, fortunate family who suddenly befell an awful tragedy, with the man of the house being mysteriously killed in his house and their only child, a girl, disappearing. They say the lady of the house still lives there, but I can’t work out how. She’d be older than Nanna if she was still alive, and Nanna is quite old…

But just the other day, there was a report of a child going missing. She goes to my school. Her brother’s not been in this week. They must be so scared. She my age. She isn’t really my friend, but anyway… she went missing, and no one can trace her, beyond leaving school to walk home.

She’s often walked the same way as me.

Where could she have gone?

Today, I’ve had Drama Club so I’m late walking back. Sarah, my best friend, doesn’t like Drama so she went home on her own, earlier.

It’s getting dark earlier and everywhere has an eerie feel about it, especially as I get closer to that gate…

But today there is something odd. One of the gate panels is slightly ajar. I’ve never seen it open before.

Curiosity killed the cat, they say. It’s a good thing my name’s not Cat… I push open the gate and step through.

The house is there, masked by overgrown plants. But no sign of anyone around.

Who might have opened that gate?

I just have to walk up a little further. It’d be rude not to. I have to push away some of the brambles that have taken over the path, laddering my school tights.


Mummy will kill me.

The house looms closer. It really does look like it could have been a grand place.

Oh My God!

The door opens.

A little woman is standing there.

“Come on in Grace. We’ve been expecting you.”

Something pulls me closer, even though my mind is telling me to just run back to the gate, and out.

My body keeps going, and before I know it, I am over the threshold.

My eyes adjust to the dimness of the light in the hallway, and as I glance to the right, through a door, what I see makes me gasp in horror, just as I hear the front door slam shut behnd me with certain finality.

Ritu 2019

64 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. stevetanham
    Mar 14, 2019 @ 08:41:00

    Quite chilling, that…. definitely worth a sequel Ritu.

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  5. Jennie
    Mar 03, 2019 @ 13:37:20

    Oooo…this was so good. You MUST finish the story, Ritu! ๐Ÿ™‚

    Liked by 2 people


  6. jenanita01
    Mar 03, 2019 @ 10:05:40

    Yes, you must tell us what happens next! Shame not to really…

    Liked by 1 person


  7. jenanita01
    Mar 03, 2019 @ 10:03:53

    Reblogged this on anita dawes and jaye marie.

    Liked by 1 person


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  9. Hugh's Views and News
    Mar 02, 2019 @ 11:56:28

    As you know, I love open-ended short stories as it gives the reader the chance to fill in the blanks โ€” a nicely paced story with lots of mystery and suspense, Ritu.

    Liked by 3 people


  10. Michele Jones
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 21:12:03

    That is one of those things. You should have listened to your mummy. I do like the mystery behind it.

    Liked by 3 people


  11. OIKOSโ„ข-Publishing
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 16:19:00

    Well written, Sis! Very imaginative. Thank you for sharing! Michael

    Liked by 2 people


  12. dornahainds
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 15:13:11

    Groovy. ๐Ÿฅ€๐Ÿ˜Ž

    Liked by 4 people


  13. Rajiv
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 05:47:46

    Nicely done

    Liked by 4 people


  14. syl65
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 04:51:51

    Reminds me of those creepy 70s horror movies, not all gory but more suspenseful. I think you’ve walked yourself into a sequel sister!

    Liked by 3 people


  15. robbiesinspiration
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 04:31:00

    OOooh, curiosity certainly didn’t do her any good. Great story, Ritu.

    Liked by 3 people


  16. balroop2013
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 03:44:43

    Well written Ritu and i like the open ending…let the reader’s imagination figure out! ๐Ÿ™‚

    Liked by 3 people


  17. Colleen Chesebro
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 02:22:34

    Nice and creepy, Sis. Well done! โค

    Liked by 4 people


  18. RAJA TAKSI TRAVEL GROUP tlp 0813 4500 6566
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 00:26:31

    What nex mystery ritu

    Liked by 4 people


  19. Sue Vincent
    Mar 01, 2019 @ 00:16:41

    Brilliant, Ritu. You wrote the youthful voice to a ‘t’. And what happened next…? ๐Ÿ˜‰ x

    Liked by 4 people


  20. dearanonymousfriend
    Feb 28, 2019 @ 21:59:52

    oh my! I am hooked….

    Liked by 5 people


  21. pensitivity101
    Feb 28, 2019 @ 20:52:33

    Good one Ritu. Are planning to follow it up?

    Liked by 4 people


  22. foodzesty
    Feb 28, 2019 @ 20:19:38

    Ohhhh I liked this one!! ๐Ÿ™‚

    Liked by 4 people


  23. Annette Rochelle Aben
    Feb 28, 2019 @ 20:17:59

    KAH- REEPY! in the best of ways

    Liked by 4 people


  24. Erika Kind
    Feb 28, 2019 @ 20:17:09

    A great way to end the story since everybody plays the story in their own minds what could have been seen!

    Liked by 4 people


  25. macalder02
    Feb 28, 2019 @ 20:13:53

    To read it at midnight. I guess I’ll wait for the continuation.

    Liked by 5 people


  26. willowdot21
    Feb 28, 2019 @ 20:13:17

    Excellent Ritu what happened next ๐Ÿ˜œ๐Ÿ’œ๐Ÿ’œ

    Liked by 4 people


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