January 25 – Flash Fiction – Edge

Charli’s prompt this week:

January 25, 2018, prompt: In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that goes to the edge. Consider what the edge might be and how it informs the story. Go where the prompt leads.

“It feels like I’m standing on a knife edge, and I don’t know which way to fall…” Lucy carried on.
“On one side there is familiarity, there are constraints, there’s suspicion, there is the happiness of being part of ‘us’.
On the other, a different way of living, emptiness, the possibility of freedom, not being judged, there’s just me.”
Dr Jones looked at his patient, surprised by the depth of her words. As her therapist, it was his job to listen, and guide her… but did he want to be the one to push her one way or another?

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65 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. manyofus1980
    Apr 08, 2018 @ 13:41:21

    I am going through some posts which I had saved, and saw this only now. I love it. Very cool piece!

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  2. Vasu Gangapalli
    Feb 07, 2018 @ 20:15:38

    Being on the lighter edge is a delima.. Well written.

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  4. Charli Mills
    Jan 29, 2018 @ 15:58:04

    That’s an interesting edge to be at, Ritu and I image that therapists witness many edges. It makes me wonder how many edges other professions see, too. I like it when a flash makes me wonder about the characters’ lives!

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  5. Irene Waters 19 Writer Memoirist
    Jan 29, 2018 @ 10:34:51

    Absolutely not. If he is a good therapist he will let her make her own decision. I think most of us would be able to relate to feeling on a knife edge not knowing which way to go.

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  6. anuragbakhshi
    Jan 29, 2018 @ 08:51:50

    That’s not a dilemma that anyone would wish to have. But then I guess they would be trained to handle just these sort of dilemmas, wouldn’t they?

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  7. Judy E Martin
    Jan 28, 2018 @ 18:13:43

    This is a tricky dilemma indeed,Sis. I don’t envy that therapist! Great story. 🙂

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  8. Marje @ Kyrosmagica
    Jan 28, 2018 @ 17:23:38

    Interesting…. Two possiblities with very different outcomes. Choices can take us down so many different pathways.

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  9. Lisa Orchard
    Jan 28, 2018 @ 16:21:46

    Awesome little snippet. I want to read more! 🙂

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  10. Em Linthorpe
    Jan 28, 2018 @ 11:45:47

    Love it.

    I recognise that edge actually, I have been a Lucy. I took the second option, and although the reason for the jump didn’t work out, if I hadn’t done it – then I wouldn’t be in the good place I am now 😊

    I’m sure Jones will make the right decision, he probably just requires a little bit more information. Good luck Mr Jones!

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  11. Phil Taylor
    Jan 28, 2018 @ 11:38:34

    Well done. Excellent inner monologue. Very genuine!

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  12. Ritu
    Jan 28, 2018 @ 11:18:56

    Glad to hear it!! 💜

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  13. Denzil TheBookOwl
    Jan 28, 2018 @ 11:17:22

    A tricky dilemma for Mr Therapist. Hopefully he doesn’t lose his impartiality in these matters.

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  14. Lucy Mitchell
    Jan 28, 2018 @ 10:59:19

    Love this. It’s got a lovely dark feeling about it. How far away from ‘the edge is she?’ and she’s called Lucy

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  15. Erika Kind
    Jan 28, 2018 @ 10:32:47

    Exactly! A good therapist leads the patient to find out for themselves what the right direction for them is.

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  16. thebeasley
    Jan 28, 2018 @ 09:59:33

    Oh I love this! It’s quite dark and like how it leaves it open for many interpretations.

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  17. rachaelstray
    Jan 28, 2018 @ 09:11:14

    Love this idea of short succinct stories I’m totally drawn in. Will Lucy be pushed over the edge? What will happen next??

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  18. Book Club Mom
    Jan 27, 2018 @ 21:22:55

    Oh I like how you have so many unknowns in this story! I’m wondering, is the “us” Lucy and her therapist?

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  19. dearanonymousfriend
    Jan 27, 2018 @ 21:15:59

    Wonderful! I want to read more! Drew me right in and made me long for more. Thank you!

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  20. OIKOS™-Redaktion
    Jan 27, 2018 @ 18:05:22

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  21. robbiesinspiration
    Jan 27, 2018 @ 17:24:15

    Nice response, Ritu. I wonder what he will decide?

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  22. Deb
    Jan 27, 2018 @ 15:45:31

    Ooh a knife edge….brilliant! And the storyline that follows…so intriguing!! Well done Ritu! 🙂

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  23. Jennie
    Jan 27, 2018 @ 13:55:07

    Oooo, this is really good, Ritu!

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  24. susansleggs
    Jan 27, 2018 @ 02:34:19

    To steer in a specific direction on one’s beliefs, may not fit the personality of the one you are steering. That’s a true dilemma. Well done.

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  25. beehalton2
    Jan 26, 2018 @ 23:52:50

    I find that one disquieting. Not sure why though.

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  26. Michael
    Jan 26, 2018 @ 22:50:22

    Edges do created that dilemma don’t they, either way could spell disaster….good response Ritu.

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  27. Annette Rochelle Aben
    Jan 26, 2018 @ 22:14:59

    Ooh, I have been in therapy… I wonder if this was something any of my therapists were wondering…

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  28. Donnalee
    Jan 26, 2018 @ 20:38:56

    I like this.

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