Smoke #writephoto

Sue’s Photo Prompt this week…


This just wasn’t fair, you know.

They always know how to find me.

I can’t help it though. Haven’t you seen the size of my belly?

I’d been fed up (again) of being ignored (again), so thought I’d run away (again). They were always busy with her, my sister. Ballet classes, horse riding, gymnastics… she always had all these great clubs to go to, because she was good at all these things. No, not good, but brilliant!

Tall, slim, pretty, with that angelic face and smile that melted all the hearts who encountered it.

The total opposite of me. Two years older than her, but 4 inches shorter, orthodontic braces to correct my overbite, and a rather rotund figure. I can’t help that though, whenever she didn’t want to eat something she would give it to me, and I, being the protective older sister, would wolf down her extras, so she didn’t get in trouble.

I didn’t realise until a lot later, how much of a mistake that was!

Still, I do like my food. At least when I go to college, I can forget her perfection, and indulge in what I am good at.

Culinary art.

Delectable cuisines from around the world…

Ok, so I’m doing a catering course.

They never complain when whatever I have been cooking graces the table, but aside from a flippant “Ta love!” I don’t get a second glance.

So I decided that I would do it. Run away, but properly, today.

There is no going back.

Well, there wasn’t, until that smoke wafted into the cave where I had painfully secreted myself…

The scent of a barbeque.

How dare they?

That was my speciality!

But you know the worst thing?

I could smell burning in that smoke! And they all know that one thing I can’t bear is good food being ruined.

I’ll just go and sort it out, it’s only one barbeque… I guess they deserved one more chance to show they care…

… and, well, I was kinda hungry!


43 Comments (+add yours?)

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  2. ellenbest24
    Dec 13, 2016 @ 21:36:22

    i enjoyed this the way between siblings (I’m one of four) is fraught with contradiction and jealousy. A Cinderella moment all be it contemporary. A good write.

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  3. Hugh's Views and News
    Dec 13, 2016 @ 18:07:25

    Kind of reminded me a little of Cinderella, but yours is a far more modern version, Ritu. Loved it and felt her ‘second best’ feeling with the way you wrote it. Great writing.

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  5. neelwritesblog
    Dec 12, 2016 @ 17:21:15

    i like your light pieces Sis. This one about some sibling who wears you down is so very relatable. Nice, inventice take on the prompt , Sis.

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  6. Mother Willow
    Dec 11, 2016 @ 04:59:55

    creative, loved your story, feels so real.

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  7. Judy E Martin
    Dec 11, 2016 @ 00:18:02

    I thought this was a really creative and original take on the prompt Sis and a story that I can certainly relate to! 🙂

    Liked by 1 person


  8. Erika Kind
    Dec 10, 2016 @ 13:11:48

    Haha… so sweet and funny, Sis!

    Liked by 1 person


  9. dornahainds
    Dec 10, 2016 @ 01:38:30

    Such a gracious example of self sacrifice for the greater good. 😉

    Liked by 1 person


  10. willowdot21
    Dec 09, 2016 @ 23:17:09

    Lovely as always Ritu!! I hate that younger sister!

    Liked by 1 person


  11. Sue Vincent
    Dec 09, 2016 @ 22:18:24

    I really couldn’t see where this one was going, Ritu 🙂

    Liked by 1 person


  12. Miriam
    Dec 09, 2016 @ 21:58:17

    Liked this. You painted interesting and intriguing characters

    Liked by 1 person


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