Sue’s prompt today for #WritePhoto
“Hello?… Hello!..”
Becca rubbed her eyes and allowed her sight to adjust to the pinpoint of light that was streaming down on her.
It wasn’t quite clear, but she thought she could see someone standing there, at the end of the tunnel.
Summoning up all her energy, she tried to shout out.“Hello! Help me!”
It wasn’t more than a whisper leaving her mouth.
Four days, she had been stuck in this cave. Four nights of pure darkness and four days of muted light she had endured with no food or water, and an excruciating pain in her leg, hip and shoulder.
She had gone for a walk to clear her head.The arguments were starting to really wear thin now. Jack was getting increasingly paranoid and it took something as simple as her working late for him to start questioning everything from where she was, to why she was wearing certain clothes… even though he knew exactly where she had been.
She knew she wasn’t in the wrong, but how long could she fend off accusations and snide remarks? If he loved her, he wouldn’t do this…
Caught up in her thoughts, she hadn’t noticed the mouth of the cave, and didn’t see the unearthed root sticking up at the entrance.
Before she knew it, she was tumbling down a shallow tunnel, before coming to a wall. She had landed awkwardly and hurt her leg.After calling out until she felt hoarse, and trying to gently ease her way back up before realising that her shoulder hurt too much and that her leg couldn’t hold her weight, she had all but given up…
The days and nights were starting to blend into one another.
Surely Jack would have alerted the authorities. Someone must be trying to find her…
Her eyes were starting to close again when she heard something again.
A rustle, and what sounded like movement close by.
She felt herself being moved gently and reassuring voices calmed her.
As long as Jack believed where she had been, she had no wish other than that…
Jun 25, 2017 @ 11:44:39
Hello?… hello! What have we here Ritu? Bones of a story methinks, or a prompt starter…or, have you already begun fleshing it out? I know it was a prompt prompt as such, but your take on it has mileage. Excellent job 😊
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Jun 25, 2017 @ 11:45:36
Thank you Gary.. . Who knows. Maybe a short story!!!!
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Jun 25, 2017 @ 11:58:48
Certainly a short story. In truth I can see you writing evolving now in leaps and bounds! This reminds me of a King story whose name I am struggling to remember. It’s where a woman is raped and left for dead in a tunnel. The tale then goes on to describe her retribution and internal trauma leading up to it. Very good psychological trail too.
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Jun 25, 2017 @ 12:15:36
You’re not the first to compare my writing at times to King… funny… I’ve never read his books!
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Jun 25, 2017 @ 13:12:12
No, not yet you haven’t….but we are working on your dark side so soon you will be reading his back catalogue 😁
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Jun 25, 2017 @ 13:12:53
Lol!!! 😈
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Jun 25, 2017 @ 10:30:44
Maybe Jack was involved in the tree root
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Jun 25, 2017 @ 10:34:14
Who knows… I just know I don’t like him…
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Jun 24, 2017 @ 20:55:21
Beautiful. 🌹🌹🌹😎
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Jun 24, 2017 @ 20:59:32
Thank.you Dorna x
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Jun 24, 2017 @ 13:38:51
Great story Sis. Isn’t it awful how some women actually have to live like this? You really conveyed how paranoid Becca was not to upset Jack, even though she had been through an appalling accident.
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Jun 24, 2017 @ 13:43:11
Thanks sis. Unfortunately it us a reality for many…. 😔
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Jun 24, 2017 @ 17:37:16
Oh I know, sis, believe me, I know!
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Jun 24, 2017 @ 17:44:00
😚😚
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 19:27:46
Even after four days in the cave, she still worries about what Jack will think? She is in serious trouble — even once she has been released from the cave. She needs to be released from Jack!
Neat, creepy story!
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 20:49:09
Thanks Lorraine. That’s the whole tbing about Jack. Even after being rescued.. . She’s still trapped.
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 16:24:32
Awesomely creepy! ❤
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 18:14:04
Thanks Traci😍
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 11:19:58
Stranded hurt in the cave for four days and nights is terrifying. A great relief that she was found.
http://ideasolsi65.blogspot.in/2017/06/tunnel-of-hope.html?m=1
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 12:12:14
Thanks for reading!
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 02:03:19
It’s good that they found her. It is hard to imagine all the thoughts that must be going through someone’s mind being trapped like that for days.
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 06:46:52
But for her to bevmorecworrued about what Jack will think, rather than be thankful she has been found… that’s sad…
Thanks 🙂
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 01:08:50
Dump Jack !
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 06:45:47
I’m thinking so too!
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 00:40:20
Oh! Sis, so darkly truly, a horrible place to be. Great post. 💖💝💜
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 06:45:37
Thanks sis 💖
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 07:18:29
💜💗🤔
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 00:10:44
Great story!
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 06:45:24
Thanks Tonya 🙂
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Jun 22, 2017 @ 23:55:35
Great take on the image Ritu, enjoyed this very much..
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 06:45:16
Thank you Michael!
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Jun 22, 2017 @ 23:07:47
Poor Becca… so many women go through that heartache…
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Jun 23, 2017 @ 06:45:00
They do indeed….
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Jun 22, 2017 @ 22:45:41
What a fantastic take on that prompt! Another very thought-provoking effort.
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Jun 22, 2017 @ 22:46:29
Thank you so much!!!
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